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Humm, I'm thinking that maybe sliced bread could take one of Thelo's pills and see if that doesn't have an effect on Thelo.
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Use his all-knowing powers to throw Thelo into one of them. Might not save them, but it sure as heck would be fun to watch.
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| Posted: Sun Jan 28, 2007 7:32 am Post subject: |
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| The White Blacksmith wrote: | | Use his all-knowing powers to throw Thelo into one of them. Might not save them, but it sure as heck would be fun to watch. |
Lawl! Even if that doesn't go through, I might just make a .gif of it.
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Hey Phang, is this going to the Headeaters yet?
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| ok i got it just obliterate everyone by brain washing them into thinking there zombies ha ha ha do it its gunna be funny
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| steve_domination35 wrote: | | ok i got it just obliterate everyone by brain washing them into thinking there zombies ha ha ha do it its gunna be funny |
Shut up. You're worse than Weaver.
(nobody better delete that post or I'll thump you for putting this one out of context)
Anyway, in reply to Whitey, not yet. But Greater Evil has. Though it hasn't been taken in yet and a lack of literate ideas has me stuck.
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Wow... you have a tie! Of course, with only two votes, it was likely to happen anyway.
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| The White Blacksmith wrote: | | Wow... you have a tie! Of course, with only two votes, it was likely to happen anyway. |
Gyah, as if I haven't waited enough already.
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lol the second one is winning, it could be very funny 
i could just see Thelo being flung into ralph, heehee
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Woohoo, four people have voted*! That's good enough for me!
I'm closing the poll, and then I'll edit this to say which has won. You know, just in case someone voted while I was typing this. That would be some kind of awesome**.
Edit: And the winner is...*drum roll*...
Throw Thelo KaKa into the other two! *Option 2 is led on stage and showered in affection by the adoring crowd*
Excellent choice, people! The third chapter of THE ROOM will be out soon. Meanwhile...let's watch the other two options battle it out for the runner-up prize in the Acid Pit of Loser's Suffering!
*Anyone who reads this story and didn't vote is a humourless sodarse.
**Hint hint.
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Ah, I enjoyed this! More please! And soon!
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Woohoo! More readers! And they find this funny! I sure hope that's lemonade in my pants!...err...never mind.
The chapter will be up soon, I promise. I'm on the right computer for it as I need to scan the next comic as well! Now whose underwear is soaked with lemonade?
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lol, i sure hope that's sheppard pie in my pants 
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looking forward to the next chap 
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A bit turmiol I might add. LOL
this is amuzing phang, tough I think there is only one choice to take kill the music bfore brain wash or kill them and runn. LOL 
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| Christalnightshade wrote: | A bit turmiol I might add. LOL
this is amuzing phang, tough I think there is only one choice to take kill the music bfore brain wash or kill them and runn. LOL |
The poll's closed, and the brainwashing was suggested by a moron. And if I added any more turmoil the website might explode, a-hyuck.
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As creator of that poll option, I'd like to take my reward of 100 fabl... What do you mean there's no reward to the creator? But tramp said... TRAMP!
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Hello Phang. A few pointers with my Head Eater hat on.
The spelling and grammar seem to be fine. No real problems there except:
| Quote: | | A sudden rush of wind sweeps through the building, blinding everyone with a flash of speed. A sonic boom rips through the hall and blows out the windows, and in a moment of chaos all is lost. Then, the dust clears, and there follows rage and confusion. The drugs and underwear have been ripped from the grasps of everyone in the room, within less than a second and leaving no evidence of the culprit. Except, of course, the name. |
Post 1 has the above, which is suddenly in present tense.
| Quote: | | Ralph continued laughing, throwing himself around on his throne. Eventually beating himself round the head with his own cane until he stopped, he composed himself, stood up and strode across the platform to the two new applicants, arms outstretched welcomingly. “Welcome, friends, to the Other Side! You’re just the people we’ve been looking for! Especially you, the – errm – puppet, thing, if you don’t mind me saying. You’re absolutely perfect for the job! And, of course, nobody can go without a large roach to keep them company…” Roach mewled in response – puppet-puppet just nodded. Were he able to talk, he would have told Ralph that his name was really Clive Johnson. Unfortunately, a lack of speech implements was one of the problems associated with being a puppet. Ralph babbled on, and Clive just stood there – he couldn’t hear, either. And it was terribly hard to lip-read someone whose way of talking had to incorporate very large teeth. Roach listened intently, and was jumped out of his shell when a thunderous cry ripped through the building. |
This and quite a lot of other paragraphs are too long. They need new lines and general splitting up.
If you add some new lines between people speaking and split up your overly long paragraphs this will be fine.
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| This story is by far way to ammusing to be healthy... I can't wait to read the next chapter...
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And now on CHANNEL IF, after a long break, guess what’s back?
THE ROOM
Episode 3: I’m bringing Ralphy back.
THE ROOM, 25 Blackheart Avenue, Little Hydeling, Houleuris.
Sliced Bread looked around himself in confusion. He didn’t have much time – Big Mother could spot him any minute! Sliding down Thelo’s quivering arm, he landed in his pocket – and entered a pocket dimension like the TARDIS on twenty different mind-altering substances – that was true, they were still here.
The porn magazine from earlier floated past in the starry, warped void. Following after it was a small monkey with a string of sausages for a tail, swimming like through water. Something hit Sliced Bread in the back of the head/vertebrae – turning round, he saw a large jar with G0d Padder scrawled on the lid; though the label announced it was powdered Priestweed for use in hot beverages. Sliced Bread wrapped himself around the bottle and unscrewed the lid, looking inside. The contents puffed out into the void, smothering him in a pale green power. As a demi-god, Sliced Bread did not need to eat, but the powder quickly absorbed itself into what veins he still had…
As he emerged from the great Pocket of Thelo KaKa, Sliced Bread stopped suddenly in his tracks. Sainsbury’s was right in front of him – a vision in truth, justice and half-price offers! The rest of the world seemed to melt around Him in glory and respect, and only Sliced Bread heard the Great Words He had to say.
“Sliced…Bread…” He rumbled, and the bird spine stood to attention. “The gymnastic abilities I blessed you with must face the ultimate test…”
“I’m ready!” shouted Sliced Bread, “I will do anything to prove my faith!” and he felt like he could, like he was the greatest being in the entire world. He could destroy this planet in a click of his fingers. He was second only to Sainsbury’s!
“You must…you must, Sliced Bread…um…” Sainsbury’s paused for a moment, observing the brightly coloured and crinkling world around him. “I…um…I know! Take the one of grey-crested hair, and throw him into the serpent of lightning, and the tortured maggot of horror!”
“Sorry, say what again?” Sainsbury’s sighed with all the force of his godly might behind him.
“Pick up Thelo KaKa and throw him in Lecro and Ralph Slilomv. Ugh, I thought people were smarter than in my day…” Sainsbury’s great Eyes of Power rolled and he faded from view. Reality suddenly straightened up and sorted out its appearance. Sliced Bread steeled his nerves, shook away his sudden hangover and prepared for the ultimate test.
Lecro’s throbbing eyes looked over to Thelo KaKa with shock. He was still sobbing and howling, but now he was levitating! Lecro looked away quickly and was almost struck hard in the face with a razor-tipped gauntlet. Groaning in frustration he had to peel his eyes back to the screen, unable, despite all his infinite power, to do anything about his predicament.
Suddenly, however, he could, as Thelo KaKa decided to stop levitating and start hurtling towards him! With a crunch and a blast of electricity the two of them hit, surged the televisions and tumbled over onto Ralph, whose head was knocked forward. His face met the needle, and it plunged itself in just above his jaw, letting its contents flood into his bloodstream.
Its contents were known to induce extreme rage in mere human mortals, never mind a technically immortal genetic/bionic freak.
A little later, and Thelo KaKa was lying unconscious on top of Lecro, who was in turn surrounded by shards of glass. Ralph was stood next to them, facing the crowd of other ROOM inmates who regarded him with abject horror - and with good reason.
The muscles in his segmented body shuddered, his eyelids twitched, his thin lips curled. His right eye welled up with tears of rage, his gloved hands bunched into fists. Long, dagger-like teeth grinded against each other. And a high-pitched noise vibrated in the heads of everyone, forming itself into one word, over and over again,
“FATHER FATHER father father father…”
Chicken hastily buried his head in his handbag, and Chiacutie attempted to hide in his plumage. Sliced Bread quickly made himself even scarcer in Thelo KaKa’s pockets. Clive hid his puppet and tried his best to look like a lamppost of some sort, and Roach scuttled about the place panicking. Jack Skellington decided that disguising himself as a rock was the best possible thing he could do at this moment, and so covered himself with his robes and huddled up in the corner.
“Ahahahhh…ahhhahahhh…” Ralph made like he was gearing up for a sneeze. He wasn’t. “Yaaaaaaaarrrrgh!” is the best that can be made out of what he said as he flipped out.
Totally and ninja-styley.
Rounding on the gathered victims, Ralph clicked his tongue, his fingers moving almost too fast to see in anticipation of things it may not be suitable to describe here.
“Which one…” he murmured under his breath, “Which one of you shall be first to meet my true horror?”
Which one indeed? It’s a toffee, because whoever dies is out of the game! So who will be going (and in a most unpleasant fashion, rest assured)?
This was a CHANNEL IF and PHANGVISION co-production.
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sorry but i think you should take out chiacutie as she hasnt had a lot of input into the story line so far...
I love the way you write, it really brings the 'characters' to life and the humour is really on my wave length.
does this mean i am slightly warped??
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My head says Chia. My heart says LECRO!!!!
Wow, I thought this one had died...
Nice one, Phang!
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| Crunchyfrog wrote: | | My head says Chia. My heart says LECRO!!!! |
Woohoo! Lol.
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I say Chia. We need Lecro so that he can be tortured abit before dying.
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Thisss thread will be moved once you have made the ssssugesssted adjussstments. 
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| Head Eater wrote: | | Thisss thread will be moved once you have made the ssssugesssted adjussstments. |
I'm on it, honesssst!
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Yeah. see? that's EXACTLY my point. And yes i know that I didn't say that.
Anyway, when's the next chappy coming out?
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Be patient! It's only been 16 days.
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Damn. If we go by the time it took her last time..... we've got a while to wait.
oh  Phang hurry up!
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lol then they can all laugh at Ralph! that'll be funny. As long as the chicken doesn't die I don't mind lol
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I already have plans for Ralph's stopping, involving DEER!
And I'm putting a poll up now.
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woooo! go chia! I voted
hey, where is MW these days? not seen him in ages
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Thisssss isssss now worthy of promotion. Ensure it ssstays ssso, or on your head be it!
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Yay! *wheels in huge cake*
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i voted chia as per my previous post... maybe it could be a fake death though designed to torture someone
maybe they had to choose whether or not to save her somehow?
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...No, I think she's just going to die.
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